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I very much enjoyed your paragraph and the portrait of your family! If you'd like to revise with a focus on only grammatical issues (as opposed to the questions of style and personal taste that mwestwood addresses above), here's where I would start:

There's an article missing in the line "She was a single mom for long time"—the phrase is usually "for a long time." (Articles are tough.)

The sentence "My younger brother is studying...

I very much enjoyed your paragraph and the portrait of your family! If you'd like to revise with a focus on only grammatical issues (as opposed to the questions of style and personal taste that mwestwood addresses above), here's where I would start:

There's an article missing in the line "She was a single mom for long time"—the phrase is usually "for a long time." (Articles are tough.)

The sentence "My younger brother is studying in grade 10 at Overfelt high school" sounds grammatically correct to me, but "studying in grade 10" is a phrase that I've heard less often. The more typical way to express that idea might be: "My younger brother is in 10th grade at Overfelt High School." (Also, in the name of the high school, the words "high school" are usually capitalized—so "I go to high school" is just fine, but if you say "I go to Overfelt High School" it has to be capitalized as part of the name "Overfelt High School.")

"He always walks or takes the bus to school because he doesn't has driver" is really close! "Has" should reflect the auxiliary verb "does" (or here "doesn't") next to it: "He always walks or takes the bus to school because he doesn't have driver." "Driver" also needs an article: "he doesn't have driver."

"He always jokes and tells something funny" is also really close! The only thing is that "tell" usually takes a direct object (meaning you have to tell someone). So how about: "He always jokes and says something funny"? Or maybe "He always jokes and tells me funny things"?

"He is a dynamic and talkative" gives me a great picture of your brother's personality! The only grammar problem here is the article (again, articles are tough). "Dynamic" is an adjective (not a noun) so it doesn't require an article. You can just say, "He is dynamic and talkative."

I understand the phrase "we always spend a good time together" with no problems! I think the more typical phrase, though, is "we always have a good time together."

Those are the only grammatical questions I had! Your family sounds wonderful. Best of luck with your studies!

Describe my family!

       There are 6 people in my family.  I have two brothers and one sister.  I am the second oldest of my brothers and sister.  My Dad goes to work everyday from 8 am to 8 pm. His job is to communicate with Vietnamese people.  My mom doesn’t work outside the home. She stays home and takes care of the house. She also raises the kids and cooks everyday.  My oldest brother is 23 years old.  He doesn’t work or go to school.  He just stays home and only does the things he wants to do. He also spends a lot of money that dad earns.  My younger brother is just the opposite.   He is 18 years old.  Everyday he goes to school and sometimes he goes to work.  He also helps my parents when he has free time.  He had diploma from high school and  now he is enrolled in the University. My parents are proud of him very much.  Finally is my sister  is 11 years old and a cute girl.  She is in the fifth grade.  I think she is a very smart girl.  I love her and my parents very much.


                      My family took these pictures on January 6, 1992                 

What the First day in This Country Was Like!

             It was at 2.00 o’clock in evening on January six 2000.  I came to the U.S.  When I got off the airplane I entered to the airport and looked around, Oh! So big and a very luxurious airport.  I had never seen that before and all the words were in English, no more Vietnamese. And also the people were strangers.  It made me a little scared because I didn’t speak English well. After one hour waiting for the customs officer to process my paper. I met my husband and my parents–in-law and also my two uncles; they welcomed me to the U.S.  I  felt happy but a little tired, because I didn’t sleep very well on the plane.

            After that, my husband drove me home. On the way home, I saw the big! big! street with a lot of cars. It did not look like in Vietnam with all motorbikes and motorcycles. They drive there with no lanes. Also the trees had no leaves “ What happened “ that I thought. So I asked my husband. He said “ Because in the winter time the weather is cold, and snow makes all the leaves fall off. “ Oh I see “ I said.

This picture I took on February 8, 2001, that was my fist time to see snow.    I took this picture on January 10, 2001, because I was surprised too see the tree with no leaves on the winter time.

      

I took this picture on February 10, 2001.It's our house

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